【Exploring Effective Presentations】 Why did it reach the audience even though what I wanted to say disappeared? | Inception-style Presentation
I included everything I wanted to say.
Yet,
I felt no response.
On the contrary,
the audience just became more guarded.
I suddenly wondered.
Inside the audience,
what is happening?
I conveyed that perspective
to the AI.
Looking at the text that came back,
I was a little surprised.
What I wanted to say
had 80% disappeared.
“Will this
actually get through!?”
That’s what I thought.
In the material before the revision,
there was this phrase:
“Does it look like the mission is being achieved without question?”
For me,
it was the core.
But,
someone who heard those words
later told me,
“I felt like my freedom was being taken away...”
The AI
erased that phrase.
What was put in its place
was the phrase
“What we want to aim for with this product.”
At first,
I felt it was lacking.
What I wanted to say
was nowhere to be found!?
But,
when I explained it using that material,
the audience listened without being guarded.
They had a look
that said, “I see, so that’s what it is.”
The words were trimmed.
But,
they had reached
the audience properly.
At that moment,
it made sense to me.
The reason I felt “80% was cut” was
because the words for my own sense of clarity
were gone.
They weren't for the audience,
just words I wanted to assert for myself.
That,
might have been the 80%.
“Getting through” and “asserting”
seem similar,
but I think they are different things.
The more you passionately argue,
the further away you can get.
When the pressure of the words disappears,
sometimes it gets through more than you’d expect.