Post-Viral Buzz: Winter Scenery (Part 3)

The crowd returning north is silent

I decided to leave this part as it is.
The Hankyu Takarazuka Main Line is a route that runs almost due north from Osaka-Umeda. However, from Kawanishi-Noseguchi, it heads west, so to continue north, one must transfer to the Nose Electric Railway.
Since the area around Umeda in Osaka is called 'Kita' (North), there were posts linking to that. It means returning north from 'Kita'.
The protagonist is riding at night. I am assuming it is the time of day when salarymen who have finished work in Osaka are returning home. Perhaps the protagonist, who is returning to their hometown, just happened to encounter the evening commute.
There was also an opinion that passengers in Osaka are not silent. Hankyu passengers have a relatively quieter image compared to other lines, and I also factored in the exhausted, worn-out state of people after work.
Other than that, there were almost no objections.

Listening only to the mountain echoes

Since there is no sea in Kawanishi, I used mountain echoes as a substitute for the sound of the sea.
There was an opinion to use 'mountain rumbling' based on the sound, but mountain rumbling is a very dangerous natural phenomenon that appears as a precursor to disasters. I considered this inappropriate as it reminds people of the earthquake swarms that actually occurred in this area before the Great Hanshin-Awaji Earthquake.
Since the passengers are silent, perhaps these are the voices of the residents along the line. Only the mountain echoes can be heard.
There were almost no objections to this either.

I, too, ride the Nose Electric Railway alone

I used the Nose Electric Railway as a substitute for the ferry.
There are few bus routes from Hibarigaoka-Hanayashiki. I thought that if one were to return north, using the Nose Electric Railway would broaden the options. Since it is 1.0 km from Hibarigaoka-Hanayashiki to Kawanishi-Noseguchi, I thought it was possible to ride the Nose Electric Railway whether by walking, taking a bus, or taking the train back.
There was an opinion that it should be 'Noseden' (short for Nose Electric Railway), but I chose the six-syllable 'Nose Electric Railway' for the sake of the rhythm.
There were no other objections.

Watching the freezing sparrow, I was crying

Since there are no seagulls in Kawanishi, I changed it to a sparrow.
The first thing I thought of was a crow. When I think of seagulls, I think of Machiko Watanabe's 'Kamome ga Tonda Hi' (The Day the Seagull Flew), but in the past, people often used to say 'The crow flew' instead. However, crows are considered pests in some places and have an ominous image, so I couldn't use them. It also seemed unnatural to be crying while watching a crow.
As a three-syllable bird, the next thing that came to mind was a sparrow; it wouldn't be unnatural for one to be in Kawanishi, and it shared the commonality of ending in 'me'. It wouldn't be strange to be crying while watching a sparrow, and it is also included in the name Hibarigaoka, so I thought it was optimal.
However, there is a question of whether one could actually see a sparrow from the train window at night, but perhaps it is closer to a mental landscape than an actual scene.
There were no objections to this.

Ah, Hibarigaoka-Hanayashiki

There were no objections to this, but there was an opinion that if one is taking the Nose Electric Railway from Kawanishi-Noseguchi, there is no need to go to Hibarigaoka-Hanayashiki.
Hibarigaoka-Hanayashiki is near the Hirai Depot and can be the terminus for local trains. I thought it was possible that the protagonist missed their stop and ended up coming back. This gives meaning to choosing the local train.
In 1910, Hanayashiki Station opened at the same time as the opening of the Minoo-Arima Electric Tramway Takarazuka Main Line. In 1916, Hibarigaoka Station opened just 0.6 km to the west. In 1961, Hibarigaoka-Hanayashiki Station was opened between the two stations, and Hibarigaoka Station was abolished. In 1962, Hanayashiki Station was abolished.
Because of this history, although the address of Hibarigaoka-Hanayashiki is in Takarazuka City, it is located straddling Takarazuka City and Kawanishi City.
Actually, when singing, the rhythm is 3-4-5, so I think 'Hibari-gaoka-Hanayashiki' is easier to sing.

The second verse

At this time, I hadn't thought about the lyrics for the second verse at all. I will discuss this next time.

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