The 5th Erotic Haiku Gathering Collection - Themes: "Morning After Haiku" & "Prohibition"

The "Erotic Haiku Gathering" is held irregularly at the "Sapporo Haiku Club".

Whether the theme of "eroticism" can blend with the form of "haiku"... we hold these gatherings while freely enjoying the adventure of it each time.

Both haiku submissions and critiques are welcome to include "delusions"! Turning on the imagination switch that you usually can't keep open, and indulging in a beautiful world, is one of the ways to enjoy this gathering.

It has been a little while, but we will now list and appreciate the high-scoring and notable haiku from the "5th Erotic Haiku Gathering" held last December.

Morning After Haiku

Polite language upon waking I dislike, snow-threatening sky. - Isao
A chill in the air, going to work in yesterday's clothes. - Gen
If snow-fireflies were to grow wings on their tears. - Yuriko
The morning after, tangled hair and sliding snow. - Yu
Opening a morning-after email in the winter sun. - Yuko
Blanket draped over breasts dyed by the dawn. - Soraso
Cells full of water, the morning of a double quilt. - Tomoyo
The morning after, a cold wind on a cold neck. - Seika

The first haiku: A sudden shift from the sweet night of sleeping and cuddling together to the loneliness of returning to the distance of using polite language when morning comes. The body pulls away, the temperature cools, and the kigo "snow-threatening sky" weighs heavily on the heart returning to calmness. Now, what will become of their relationship after this?
The second haiku: Going to work after a night spent on impulse. Don't ask unrefined questions like, "Couldn't you have woken up a little earlier and gone home?" The two are shrinking in fear of being noticed by those around them (especially their boss). "A chill in the air" is clever.
The third haiku: Carrying the sentimental mood of the morning after on snow-fireflies. As a haiku, it has a lot of lyrical elements; it might even be good to add something to the seven-seven and make it a waka poem (a self-critique).
The fourth and fifth haiku are poems that directly incorporate the word "morning after." In the fourth, the "tangled hair" and the "sliding snow" overlap in their dishevelment, which is beautiful. The fifth is a calm, adult love. The modernity of an email rather than a letter, and the scene of opening it leisurely in the winter sun, warming the heart. Adult.
The sixth haiku: The archaic word "shinonome" (dawn) carries the scent of the morning after. Even though it reads vividly about breasts, it is to the poet's credit that it is elegant without a sexual odor. The fact that they are dyed is not just because of the dawn light, but perhaps also a remnant of last night's heat. The happiness of falling back asleep, wrapped in a blanket, enjoying the afterglow.
The seventh haiku: The satisfaction of having finished the exchange of life is evident in the cells full of water. The "morning of a double quilt" also conveys the feeling of happiness while half-dozing.
The eighth haiku is a sad one. I suppose it's a case of the other person not feeling as much as I do... They were kind in bed, but left without a second thought. I feel like saying, "Hey, get blown by the cold wind and realize it a little!"

You all responded brilliantly with your own "experience levels" to the question of how to compose a morning-after haiku, which is a form that relies on objects rather than speaking at length about one's thoughts. I felt that the afterglow of the morning after can be sufficiently expressed through the cropping of a scene and the chemical reaction of the combined kigo.

Incorporating the character "Prohibition" (Kin)

Frozen butterfly, holding it as if unlocking a forbidden book. - Shiruma☆
A forbidden zone where I am with you, a swan. - Yogisha
That lie is a forbidden move, cold camellias fall. - Hana
Snowy night, tongue and tongue holding each other under house arrest. - Yoka Kirin
Two people becoming a frozen lake of forbidden ground. - Samuyumu
If I close my eyes, 18-rated light snow. - Kazuhiro
Forbidden love, a cup noodle Christmas Eve. - Bizen

The first haiku: The mysterious atmosphere that permeates the phrasing "holding it as if unlocking a forbidden book" is charming. You shouldn't touch it, but you do. Longing turns into reality, and you can see the fingertips treating the other person with great care. It was also a topic of discussion, with opinions on whether to cut with "ya" at the top or connect with "no." Both choices are valid, but I feel that by cutting broadly with "ya," the afterimage of the frozen butterfly remains strong, and the depth of the poem is born in the margin of the leap.
The second haiku is also a mysterious situational setting. The word "forbidden zone" harbors a certain erotic excitement. You want to capture it, but you must not. Just watching that beautiful swan-like body from the side.
The third haiku has an image of having a complicated situation. While lies are part of any romantic affair, a "forbidden move" lie is not peaceful. If you are told that lie, you will wake up from the dream at once. Like a cold camellia falling.
The fourth haiku is a poem full of eros. By fusing the humidity and viscosity of "tongue and tongue holding each other under house arrest" with the snowstorm, it is sublimated into a drama.
The fifth haiku is quite profound and, if one were to call it difficult, it is difficult. The tense beauty of a "frozen lake of forbidden ground." Does it mean that a world of two people, isolated and inaccessible to others, is spreading there?
The sixth haiku: "Light snow" (Sasameyuki) brings to mind Junichiro Tanizaki's novel (and the film based on it). Since it is not in quotation marks, it is interesting that the kigo "light snow" itself can be read as being 18-rated.
The seventh haiku: The fun of the collision of two things. The desperation of "forbidden love" and the limp feeling of a "cup noodle Christmas Eve." It is modern to be slurping cup noodles instead of "wonton" like in a Fumio Akimoto haiku.

I set the theme thinking that "prohibition" would be relatively easy to lean toward the erotic, but there were many haiku where each person's skill shone through, such as high-quality eros and arrangements that added haiku flavor.

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The Sapporo Haiku Club is open to anyone, so if you are interested, please inquire here. The Erotic Haiku Gathering is held about once every six months; otherwise, it is a "normal haiku gathering" (lol). The next regular haiku gathering utilizing the Summer Cloud System is scheduled to have its set themes announced on January 22, 2025. (We also announce on X @yurikoseto)

If you would like to see works and appreciations from past Erotic Haiku Gatherings, please go here.