[Shun-hai] Personal Awards (6 Haiku) by Tsuru

Thank you for your support. ^^
Hello. This is Tsuru. ☆彡

The Minna no Haiku Taikai [Shun-hai] has ended,
and I've finally caught my breath.

Now that I've settled down,
a bit late, but
please allow me to present my personal awards. m(_ _)m

I already gave out personal awards for tanka,
but this time it's for haiku.

I haven't set any rankings, and the order of posting is random. 🌳
Let's get started right away.

Oh, I decided based on my first impression of
thinking, 'Oh, this is nice.'
I've also written my own personal thoughts,
so please forgive me. m(_ _)m

Well then. ^^

Tsuru's Personal Awards (Six Haiku)

Neeton.

So big, that one bite of yours, shaved ice

The single-character space is very effective in this haiku.
It successfully expresses the size of that one bite.

It even conveys the cuteness of that one bite.
^^

I thought it was an adorable haiku. 🌼

Olav 153

Like a child who has put down their brush, mackerel clouds

The concept is wonderful.
The phrasing 'like having put down a brush' is
interesting. ^^

Imagining from the mackerel sky,
it feels like you couldn't help but put down your pen.
I thought this was a haiku full of charm. 🌼

Kyodai Koro-san

Arranging lilies of the valley, the moonlight deepens

First of all, the appearance of the characters is beautiful. ☆彡
It is also clear and serene when read aloud.

The development where the moonlight deepens
through the act of arranging them
is poetic and wonderful, I thought.

I also found myself imagining the weight of the lilies of the valley.

I thought this was a haiku that fully utilized
the expression 'deepens'. ^^
It is a beautiful haiku. 🎵

Mero-san

Once again, alone and carefree | Distant Fireworks

This is a haiku with a charming, down-to-earth style.
The contrast with the distant fireworks is brilliant,
and the seasonal word stands out very well. ^^

Perhaps the feeling of being a bit faint
is also being played upon.

This haiku, composed without forgetting a bird's-eye perspective,
is very attractive, and I was deeply moved.
It's human nature, isn't it? ^^

Tsunako Aso-san

Live even if you are alone, a Tokyo jellyfish

This is a haiku where the charm of uniqueness and humor shines through.
The phrase "Tokyo jellyfish"
being recited all in one breath
is what I thought was a great achievement. ^^

With this, the expression "living alone in Tokyo,"
which tends to be mundane,
has been transformed into a wonderful haiku.

The original phrasing of "Tokyo jellyfish"
seems to directly metaphorize
the message of "live alone"
just as it is.

I thought this was a very striking haiku. ^^/

Madoka Sasara

Counting the lantern plant flowers at Senso-ji Temple

This is a haiku I liked at first impression, but
after reading your article,
I learned that the flowers can be a summer kigo (seasonal word). ^^

It is a haiku that feels both common and emotional,
conveying that it was composed with familiarity
while blending into the town of Asakusa.

Perhaps it is because you are a local
that you can compose it so simply. ^^

The lighthearted act of
casually counting the lantern plant flowers
without being too earnest
expresses the mood beautifully. ^^

☆彡

That concludes the six haiku. ☆彡
Thank you very much
for letting me read your wonderful haiku. m(_ _)m

Written by Tsuru 🌳