Dodoitsu Introduction - Tomone-sama - Ohayone Dodoitsu Grand Prize

Submitted Works

If I walk
without an umbrella
the tears that stream down
will wash away

Even on an old
speaker
playing jazz
sounds stylish

When I write down
a long formula
the characters in my notebook
become quantum

Thinking I will
walk leisurely
on the way back from shopping
I walk fast

(Tomone-sama)

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Yone-chan's Comment

It touches my heart, and I find myself nodding along. I think you have found the little wonders that appear in the casual days of everyday life and turned them into Dodoitsu. Thank you (^o^)
The first one captures the feeling of tears overlapping with rain.
The second one captures the contrast and mutual enhancement between an old speaker and stylish jazz.
For the third one, I thought that is exactly how it feels when looking at long mathematical formulas. I felt the sensation that each character in these formulas might be a quantum, like an uncertain illusion, yet existing in reality.
The fourth one captures the feeling of knowing in your head that it is better to be leisurely, but feeling rushed anyway.
I felt all of those things. It is very wonderful!

Return Poem

"Mysterious seeds can be found in everyday life"

On the old equipment, the usual jazz plays

Turning the notebook of formulas upside down, the quanta are fluttering and jumping

By the rainy window, shall I go home early? No, I am fine just like this

Without even a large umbrella, it is fine to just let the tears stream down

Thank you very much.