[Haiku? Senryu? (Extra Edition)] "How a Butterfly Without Weapons Fights"
What is the most important thing in haiku?
It is said that more important than the "5-7-5" rhythm or including a "seasonal word" (kigo) is "capturing a momentary movement of the heart."
It is often described as "clicking the shutter of the heart."
In other words, I understand it to mean that for something that has moved your heart, you need to zoom in, focus, and adjust the lens to search for the true form of that feeling.
They say it is fun to be able to transcribe that momentary heart in an image into a short poem, as if clicking a shutter.
The amount of information you can pack into a short 17-syllable poem is not very large, is it?
That is quite difficult (^^;
Well, I thought about that for a moment.
The standard way of thinking in haiku is that there should be only one seasonal word.
Therefore, in haiku groups with strict rules, there is a possibility that a haiku with multiple seasonal words might be rejected without question, without even examining the content (^^;
Also, I can understand that creating a poem with multiple seasonal words where the words have a synergistic effect is quite difficult unless you are an advanced practitioner.
For that reason, it is probably safer for beginners not to create poems with multiple seasonal words, as there is a high possibility of failure.
However, I learned that there is a famous haiku that uses three quite rare seasonal words.
"Green leaves to the eyes, the mountain cuckoo, and the first bonito of the season"
This is a poem written by Yamaguchi Sodo, a haiku poet from the Edo period, and it uses three summer seasonal words: "green leaves," "cuckoo," and "first bonito."
"Green leaves" are something to be admired with the eyes, stimulating the sense of sight.
The voice of the "mountain cuckoo" is heard with the ears, stimulating the sense of hearing.
And the "first bonito" is something to be tasted with the mouth, delighting the sense of taste.
This poem is highly regarded as a truly sensory poem that incorporates three of the five senses (@@)
It is said that if there are clearly "strong seasonal words" and "weak seasonal words" in a haiku, and it is clear which one is the protagonist, then multiple seasonal words are acceptable because they do not interfere with each other.
[When seasonal word overlapping is permitted]
・It is okay if the main subject is clear!
・When two or more seasonal words enhance each other
However, since I learned that the essence of haiku technique lies in seasonal words and the 'kire' (cutting word), I think it might be interesting to try using three or four seasonal words as a training method.
It is safer for beginners not to overlap seasonal words.
But, I would hesitate to do that for a high school assignment (^^;
Since this is not that!
Well, precisely because I am a beginner, I have to take risks (i.e., enjoy myself) (grin)
So, it is in a boy's nature to want to do what he is told not to do!
There is just no helping it, is there? ^^;
I secretly composed a haiku using a cool overlap of "spring" seasonal words ( ｀ー´)ノ
[Did it work out? Three seasonal words version]
"Kashinfu (Flower-news wind), Hiodoshicho (Comma butterfly) battle, Flower war"
(Kashinfu, Hiodoshicho-ra no, Hana-ikusa)
[Self-evaluation]
The main subject is the "Hiodoshicho (Comma butterfly)", after all!
[Kashinfu]
A wind that announces the blooming of flowers.
A wind that blows from early spring to early summer.
[Hiodoshicho]
The "Hiodoshi" in Hiodoshicho comes from the appearance of its red upper wings.
Hiodoshi refers to "Hiodoshi-no-yoroi" (scarlet-laced armor).
Hiodoshi is a type of lacing using red (scarlet) threads.
Odoshi is a Japanese armor manufacturing style, made by binding armor plates together with leather or thread.
[Hana-ikusa]
To fight brilliantly.
A brilliant battle.
For this haiku, I was reading the book listed in the references, and I composed it by likening the "territorial disputes" of butterflies that have no weapons to a battle—or rather, it would be more accurate to say I forced the connection (boom)
[Reference Book]
"How Butterflies Without Weapons Fight: In a World Where Rivals Are Invisible" (New Animal Chronicles) by Tsuyoshi Takeuchi
[Troublesome (^^; Four seasonal words version]
Hmm... (Not yet created)
[Version with 5 kigo (seasonal words) that no one has ever done before?]
What should I do??? (Not yet created)
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[A battle of flowers is near!?]
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[Reference Article]
<Reference Article>
[My First Haiku] 🌸Spring Kigo (Seasonal Words)🌸
https://note.com/minhai/n/n61e5a94e8a9c